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Post by sinceifell4u on Mar 10, 2009 22:46:10 GMT -5
And i loved your story on FF.net too! I SQUEEEEE like a little girl LOL when i get to read new stuff! Keep it coming! Thank you Rose, so sweet as always I modified an answered post but am re-posting here...(didn't want Gray's head to get too pumped up, lol ;D) Ok, I should've said this when I initially posted...thanks to Diane for her positive critique. The title "Whose Your Daddy" is a play on one of Gray's avatar's and subject line from our EFDIAV review... Who's is grammatically correct but the title is a personal joke based on the inspiration I got from Gray's subject line in that particular avatar (Whose your daddy now Maddie)...I just thought it was so funny, lol
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Post by diane on Mar 10, 2009 22:49:31 GMT -5
Flesh subplot....scene two.
NEXT: In the car, after Wicklow is arrested.
David at the wheel…..and from beside him…
Maddie: I can’t help thinking that if we’d never taken this case…maybe this wouldn’t have happened.
David: This little mess was on the drawing boards a long time before we happened along.
Maddie: I suppose so. Still…I just feel so horrible…
David: For ol’ Crazy John? I dunno…the guy didn’t exactly have all the social graces down, did he?
Maddie: Social graces?
David nods: Fills up an encyclopedia of babble about this babe, then blows her ol’ man’s brains all over the bulletin board. Guess he never knew what the hell he wanted.
…and Maddie looks at him for a moment…and then….
Maddie: You’re one to talk.
David: In English, please?
A long moment, and then…
Maddie: Tell me, Mr. Savoir-faire, are you forgetting you mentioned something to me today?
David: Did I?
Maddie: You did.
David: About?
Maddie: About moving in together, David.
ON DAVID…..eyes straight ahead…
David: I never said such a thing.
ON MADDIE…turning to him…
Maddie: You did so.
David: Did I?
Maddie: I heard it.
David: Did you hear what I said after that?
Maddie: After that?
David: Uh-huh.
Maddie: You retracted it, if that’s what you mean.
David: Aha!
Maddie: Why?
David: Why?
…and David just shrugs… and after a MOMENT…
Maddie: David, do you want to move in together?
…looking at her….knocking it back over the net….
David: Do you want to move in together?
…a little irritated by his manner….
Maddie: Not if you don’t.
David: Well, I sure don’t want to if you don’t.
ON MADDIE
…shaking her head exasperatedly and looking off out of the window…
Maddie: What’s the use?
ON DAVID….smug
David: I thought you’d see it that way.
Maddie: You thought right.
And then…defensive… Maddie: I’m relieved.
David: I’m relieved.
Maddie (topping him): It’s a big weight off my shoulders.
David: Huge weight off mine…
Maddie: Ten tons….
David: Fifteen…
A MOMENT….and then…
Maddie: So it’s settled then…
David: Finito.
Maddie: We’ll just remain business associates.
David: Associated associates.
Maddie: And Lamaze partners?
David: Sure. The Flying Lamazes.
Maddie: But living together is over….
David: And out…
Another MOMENT sitting there…and then….
Maddie: You’re right. It wouldn’t have worked.
David: Woulda been a mudslide.
Maddie: Worse…the idea of having someone around who’s always be-bopping, finger-popping, moonwalking, from dawn ‘til dark….
David: While he’s being nagged: “Put the cap back on the toothpaste”…”Take your feet off the couch”…”Leave the toilet seat down”…
Maddie: Building a Matterhorn of beer cans….leaving your toenail clippings in the bed….
…and DAVID shoots her a look……
David (sarcastic): ‘N you’d just be perfect, wouldn’t you?
A MOMENT…and then….
The two of them turn to each other ……
Maddie: Never’ve worked. David: Never’ve worked.
And they stare off straight ahead……
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Post by sinceifell4u on Mar 10, 2009 22:55:29 GMT -5
Wow, sucks...how could they (the writers) do this to us!!! Ok, they change their mind right? Please say they changed their minds, at least on paper~
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Post by rose35 on Mar 10, 2009 23:00:59 GMT -5
Wow, sucks...how could they (the writers) do this to us!!! Ok, they change their mind right? Please say they changed their minds, at least on paper~ Ok i'm just so speechless.......ok maybe not LOL WOW again Diane! I just really loved it again. It's really making me so mad,ok madder than i was that M/D didnt get to have all of this together. It could have been so wonderful to see them argue over this stuff but then fall into bed with one another and well ya know I get so sad over this stuff, yup so need a shrink, wonder if Maddies is free? LOL
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Post by sinceifell4u on Mar 10, 2009 23:03:05 GMT -5
Ok i'm just so speechless.......ok maybe not LOL WOW again Diane! I just really loved it again. It's really making me so mad,ok madder than i was that M/D didnt get to have all of this together. It could have been so wonderful to see them argue over this stuff but then fall into bed with one another and well ya know I get so sad over this stuff, yup so need a shrink, wonder if Maddies is free? LOLI know I'm soooo torn, OMG, (the deepest sigh possible) hope she doesn't fall asleep during my 'essed-ness rant, LOL
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Post by rose35 on Mar 10, 2009 23:13:36 GMT -5
Ok i'm going to try to answer some of these and finish tomorrow maybe on the rest or work on thme all week. We sure got alot of great questions!
1: In the beginning of this episode we find out Maddie/Walter have annulled their 2 week marriage . What do you think of Walter's breaking the 3rd wall ( or is it 4th wall LOL) and talking to the audience about them being happy he is leaving while he exits the Blue Moon Office ?
Oh it sure was great! thanks guys for letting me know it was the 4th wall! LOL ML was known for breaking the 4th wall with M/D but hey why not get others involved. At least it wasnt done alot but when it was done at the right moment and it was here it was great! Poor Dennis, he just played the part and got a headache i guess from all the fans yelling about his character i bet. Too bad the writers didnt listen to the fans in time for the end of season 5! ARRRRGGGHHH LOL
5:Where David says his slate is clean to Maddie during that big speech, lets all think back to an episode titled Tale In Two Cities. David slept with someone he just met at a bar/club during that episode, Do you think Daivd's slate is really clean? Do you feel he lied when he said that or was he just forgetting it happened or were the writers forgetting that it happened ? Does that line bother you since we the audience know what he did and Maddie doesnt?
Ok well you guys have opened my eyes on this , i have not been very fond of TITC due to what David does. I always felt hey Maddies only gone like what 2 weeks and he goes and sleeps with another woman yet he proclaims to love Maddie so much. I always got so angry with David here but you guys have shown alot of light going on in my head. Maddie does mention in TTTM that they should sell the agency and get out of each others lives right? So she takes off and has no contact with him for 2 weeks, so hes got to thinking this woman aint ever coming back , to hell with her OK FINE! Maybe his slate is clean. Maddie is no angel we sure no that so if it ever had come out i guess David could throw that stuff back at her then to be even i guess. Oh well another possible fan fic eh? LOL
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Post by diane on Mar 10, 2009 23:15:17 GMT -5
OK……post number three from the script. This is the TAG, which replaces the M&D making their Lamaze appointments TAG.
FADE IN:
ON THE BLUE MOON OFFICE
…early morning….seemingly empty…and then….
DAVID …sneaks out of Maddie’s office…mischief written all over his face…
ON MADDIE
…slipping out of David’s office surreptitiously…
ON THE TWO OF THEM
…not seeing each other as they PULL THE OFFICE DOORS shut behind them…and then, they JUMP with a start as they turn to discover each other…then feigning nonchalance…
David: Just checking to see if you were in yet.
Maddie: Me too.
David: Well…I’m in.
Maddie: So am I.
David: Morning.
Maddie: Morning.
…and then, they edge past each other a bit warily as they head towards their respective offices…
ON DAVID
…HOVERING at the door of his office, he watches as Maddie disappears into her office, CLOSING THE DOOR BEHIND HER…and then David HOT FOOTS it over to her office and PUTS HIS EAR to the door…
CUT TO:
Maddie…CROSSING to her desk where she sees a large brightly colored BALLOON floating above her desk…a thick strand of brightly colored streamers hanging from it…
ON MADDIE
…Looking down at her desk top, where a long HAT PIN….adorned with a garish stone at one end lies on top of a card…
ON MADDIE
…as she picks up the card…
Maddie (reading): “Pop me ‘n see?”
DAVID
…listening at her door, and then we hear a LOUD POP…at which David grins and HOT FOOTS IT BACK to his office…..
CUT TO:
MADDIE
…sitting in her chair…a look of surprise on her face as a cloud of glitter and confetti settles around her….and then, in the pile of streamers on her desk, she notices something and she reaches for a….
KEY
…to which is attached a small tag….
ON MADDIE
…reading the tag….
Maddie: “Casa Addison?”
…and then a big smile spreads across her face as she settles back in her chair, holding the key between the palms of her hands…and we…
CUT TO DAVID:
…in his office…quite obviously pleased with himself, and then taking another pull on the orange juice container, he replaces the carton in the refrigerator…and then, turning towards his desk, he notices a brightly gift wrapped…BOX…lying on his blotter….
ON DAVID
..crossing to his desk…he picks up the box….OPENS IT and finds a smaller, similarly wrapped BOX which he opens to find ANOTHER SMALLER BOX, which gives way to yet a still SMALLER BOX…out of which falls a….
HOUSE KEY
…on a key ring with a brass tag…
David (reading): “Chez Hayes”
CLOSE ON DAVID
…as a big smile spreads across his face…and then, giving the key a little toss in the air….we….
FREEZE FRAME
THE END
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Post by diane on Mar 10, 2009 23:23:47 GMT -5
Hey Rose, I am pretty sure we can still hate "Tale in Two Cities", and think that David still has a clean slate.
I don't think I ever said anything like this before, but David's one nighter was such a guy thing.....and he was just so miserable after it.....I'm pretty sure he suffered enough.
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Post by sinceifell4u on Mar 10, 2009 23:24:47 GMT -5
OMG, OMG, OMG, OMG, OMG, OMG, OMG~that was sosooooo good! Alright people, it's time for us to put in on that DeLorian...we need to go back...in time...and fix this mess!!!
Great place to pick up from on a Fan Fic, WOW~Diane, you're the greatest!!!
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Post by beesnbears on Mar 10, 2009 23:25:28 GMT -5
Aw dangit, I hate it when this happens......I miss a few hours and there is new fanfic, scripts and gray's avatar!!! I gotta get busy readin'!! ;D
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Post by rose35 on Mar 10, 2009 23:29:22 GMT -5
Hye Rose, I am pretty sure we can still hate "Tale in Two Cities", and think that David still has a clean slate. I don't think I ever said anything like this before, but David's one nighter was such a guy thing.....and he was just so miserable after it.....I'm pretty sure he suffered enough. So true Diane he sure showed it at the end of the episode, he wasnt some happy guy who just got with some woman, he was probably feeling worse off after what had just happened. Sure didnt help him feel any better.
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Post by rose35 on Mar 10, 2009 23:32:25 GMT -5
OMG, OMG, OMG, OMG, OMG, OMG, OMG~that was sosooooo good! Alright people, it's time for us to put in on that DeLorian...we need to go back...in time...and fix this mess!!! Great place to pick up from on a Fan Fic, WOW~Diane, you're the greatest!!! Oh SINCE me and you are just in heaven eh? LOL I still can't believe this was in the other script. Ok Diane fess up you wrote this right? LOL Why didnt the writers keep this stuff in? Do you think they knew then what was going to happen in the first episode of season 5 and figured it would be worse for the fans to gets this much enjoyment with M/D in the end of this episode? hmmmm just wondering. SIGH!
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Post by sinceifell4u on Mar 10, 2009 23:39:30 GMT -5
OMG, OMG, OMG, OMG, OMG, OMG, OMG~that was sosooooo good! Alright people, it's time for us to put in on that DeLorian...we need to go back...in time...and fix this mess!!! Great place to pick up from on a Fan Fic, WOW~Diane, you're the greatest!!! Oh SINCE me and you are just in heaven eh? LOL I still can't believe this was in the other script. Ok Diane fess up you wrote this right? LOL Why didnt the writers keep this stuff in? Do you think they knew then what was going to happen in the first episode of season 5 and figured it would be worse for the fans to gets this much enjoyment with M/D in the end of this episode? hmmmm just wondering. SIGH! That would have sent the ratings back through the roof!!! I know it!!! Everybody would have tuned in and some new folks, wow, that would have been so great...but...que sera sera, I still have great hope and great Faith...David/B and Maddie/C... shall be redeemed (I'm so totally 'essed, LOL~it even amazes me!) Rose your questions are right on point!
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Post by beesnbears on Mar 10, 2009 23:42:27 GMT -5
There is no way I can get embedded in this tonight, but I will tomorrow!!....my golf day will most likely be rained out.......but, I wanted to thank jpen for her comment about the title. I knew it was derived from a bible verse, but I did not have time to really think about it today. Gosh, I never would have connected word having been made flesh in the form of baby Hayes........the baby really does represent commitments and promises that were never kept. And I mean never kept by the writers. I just don't think I will ever understand AWWAV. ....just makes me wanna throw and kick things.......
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Post by lin212 on Mar 11, 2009 6:38:58 GMT -5
2: Maddie chases David down the hall and asks, “Why don’t you talk to me about all of those things you don’t want to talk about?” Put yourself in David’s shoes and answer Maddie’s question. BTW...thanks to Rose, Bees and Lin for these fabulous questions...I'm gonna try and tackle this one here. As David... "Why should I? You never took the time to talk to me...not really. We talk and talk and talk but what have we really discussed...all that talking only added up to idle chatter, hurt feelings, confusion. So, it's your time... talk! Tell me why you left, why I found out through 4th person about the baby...why you wouldn't let me come for you...why you would marry a perfect stranger...why you are too selfish, too bull headed to let yourself and me, for that matter, be happy? Answer those things and maybe...maybe... I'll tell you what you want to know." That's me in David's shoes, I wanna know, lol! Super stuff, since. I just love this answer. Love your fanfic too! Keep it up!
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