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Post by jpen on Mar 10, 2009 21:37:49 GMT -5
11: This episode ends with the audience feeling very hopeful for M/D and their relationship. They are planning lamaze classes and look very happy. We know Season 5 should have continued this way but unfortunately it doesnt. Do you wish they never ended this episode that way? No, I can't say I do, as frustrated as I am by S5. I really love that ending scene--reminiscent of some of the best epilogues from S2 and S3 (there's something about David standing in the doorway that just about does me in!), where the connection between them is clear and the dialogue sweet. Besides, it made a great springboard for a fantasy version...where would fan fic writers be if it wasn't for scenes like this!
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Post by sinceifell4u on Mar 10, 2009 21:45:58 GMT -5
11: This episode ends with the audience feeling very hopeful for M/D and their relationship. They are planning lamaze classes and look very happy. We know Season 5 should have continued this way but unfortunately it doesnt. Do you wish they never ended this episode that way? No, I can't say I do, as frustrated as I am by S5. I really love that ending scene--reminiscent of some of the best epilogues from S2 and S3 (there's something about David standing in the doorway that just about does me in!), where the connection between them is clear and the dialogue sweet. Besides, it made a great springboard for a fantasy version...where would fan fic writers be if it wasn't for scenes like this! [/b][/quote] LOL, Amen JPen
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Post by sinceifell4u on Mar 10, 2009 21:49:26 GMT -5
Thanks Gray and JPen for reading my Fan Fic, also for the nice things you both said!
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Post by diane on Mar 10, 2009 22:07:06 GMT -5
Ok....here is the first scene from the script.......there are two more coming.
From the script of “The Flesh Was Made Word” version 11 March 6
This starts right after Maddie asks David if they can start with a clean slate….(and by the way, the entire argument is conducted in the hallway, with the employees’ faces pressed up against the glass).
David turns around…a little incredulous…and then….
David (a slight smile): A clean slate? Forget the past? Start over, just like that? Like it’s the first day we met?
He walks towards her.
David: Lemme give you a little refresher course on the last first day we met…..
Pointing at the door….
David: When you walked through that door, fired everyone, dissolved the agency, and landed a roundhouse slap on my face. Lady, I’m here to tell you, it’s been one helluva ride ever since! Never dull, maybe, but one helluva ride! ‘Cause like it or not, we do have a pattern, we do have a history, you ‘n me have a chemistry like nitro and glycerin, ‘n the one plain and simple truth of it is there ain’t nothin’ we can do about it! That’s the way it’s been, that’s the way it is, that’s the way it’s always gonna be.
Maddie (challenging): Always?
David: Always!
Maddie: Nothing we can do about it?
David: Not a damn thing!
Maddie: So what you’re saying?
David: What do you mean what am I saying?
Maddie: What are we going to do?
David: Do?
Maddie: Yes, do!
David: You’re askin’ me?
Maddie: I’m asking you, David, you’re the one shaking the death rattle, you’re the one giving the eulogy!
David: I’m the one who’s telling the truth. ‘N you want to hear the rest of the truth? I don’t know what to do!
Maddie: What about trying, David? What about that?
David: What about all the times we have tried?
Maddie: What about putting all that behind us?
David: It isn’t that easy, Maddie.
Maddie: I didn’t say it was easy, nothing’s guaranteed!
David: Especially with us! Why don’t you just face it? We are who we are, ‘n if we try to change it, we try to take that away, then I don’t know what’s there.
Maddie: Okay! Fine! We are who we are! So what do you want to do, call the whole thing off?
David: I want to move in together!
And that stops her dead in her tracks as she just looks at him….and…
ON THE WINDOW
…as everyone mouths “move in together?!”….and
BACK TO SCENE
…as they stand there…David a little at loose ends….Maddie still a little incredulous…and THE EMPLOYEES LOOK BACK AND FORTH between the two of them, waiting…
David: Forget I said that, bad idea, never came out of this mouth…
Maddie: David…..
David: Look, I gotta go…
And he turns and abruptly leaves…Maddie just watching him…THE EMPLOYEES CONTORTING THEMSELVES TO SEE HIM LEAVE ALSO……
Cut to Terri’s house
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Post by diane on Mar 10, 2009 22:10:29 GMT -5
Since.....
Nice job with your first fanfic. Some great stuff in there!
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Post by graycav56 on Mar 10, 2009 22:13:22 GMT -5
Interesting script change Diane. I have to drop off now...actually NODDING off, but I'll pick back up later.
Have a great great night buddies!
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Post by sinceifell4u on Mar 10, 2009 22:14:01 GMT -5
OMG Diane, that is AWESOME!!! OMG...I love that...the clean slate speech could have still been worked into this episode...this would have changed everything if they would have just...I can't even think about this~WOW...thanks Diane
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Post by sinceifell4u on Mar 10, 2009 22:16:46 GMT -5
Since..... Nice job with your first fanfic. Some great stuff in there! Thanks Diane...thanks everybody! Ok, I should've said this when I initially posted...thanks to Diane for her positive critique. The title "Whose Your Daddy" is a play on one of Gray's avatar's and subject line from our EFDIAV review... Who's is grammatically correct but the title is a personal joke based on the inspiration I got from Grays subject line in that particular avatar ( Whose your daddy now Maddie)...I just thought it was so funny, lol
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Post by jpen on Mar 10, 2009 22:16:52 GMT -5
Move in together? MOVE IN TOGETHER?!?! Um, okay, that kinda puts a different spin on things than "You still have your incisors, so I guess that means I still must care"!
Can't wait to read the rest!
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Post by diane on Mar 10, 2009 22:24:20 GMT -5
As a carpal tunnel avoidance measure, we wobblies just gotta chip in and buy Diane a scanner with OCR capability. Haha Gray.....the best is, I have one sitting right beside me that I am not quite sure how to work. I am more an old fashioned girl...I still do my writing with a real pen, on a yellow legal pad! Besides...I am unemployed.....lots of time on my hands! Luckily for you all, I have very few season 5 scripts......and next week, I will be away at Phillies' Spring Training! BUT.....if you could teach me how to do that avatar thing!!!!!
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Post by sinceifell4u on Mar 10, 2009 22:27:28 GMT -5
2: Maddie chases David down the hall and asks, “Why don’t you talk to me about all of those things you don’t want to talk about?” Put yourself in David’s shoes and answer Maddie’s question. BTW...thanks to Rose, Bees and Lin for these fabulous questions...I'm gonna try and tackle this one here. As David... "Why should I? You never took the time to talk to me...not really. We talk and talk and talk but what have we really discussed...all that talking only added up to idle chatter, hurt feelings, confusion. So, it's your time... talk! Tell me why you left, why I found out through 4th person about the baby...why you wouldn't let me come for you...why you would marry a perfect stranger...why you are too selfish, too bull headed to let yourself and me, for that matter, be happy? Answer those things and maybe...maybe... I'll tell you what you want to know." That's me in David's shoes, I wanna know, lol!
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Post by rose35 on Mar 10, 2009 22:34:24 GMT -5
OMG Diane, that is AWESOME!!! OMG...I love that...the clean slate speech could have still been worked into this episode...this would have changed everything if they would have just...I can't even think about this~WOW...thanks Diane OMG OMG! THUD! >>>>>>>>>>>>>Ok i can't believe they didnt go with this scene in the episode. I think it's fabulous! OMG again! LOL Just perfect i think. He's scared but still he loves her just by saying at the end Move in together! SIGH! To me that would have been a dream to hear that. i myself love this scene alot! WOW! Diane thanks again! Super for you to take the time and share! We so appreciate it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Post by rose35 on Mar 10, 2009 22:37:16 GMT -5
2: Maddie chases David down the hall and asks, “Why don’t you talk to me about all of those things you don’t want to talk about?” Put yourself in David’s shoes and answer Maddie’s question. BTW...thanks to Rose, Bees and Lin for these fabulous questions...I'm gonna try and tackle this one here. As David... "Why should I? You never took the time to talk to me...not really. We talk and talk and talk but what have we really discussed...all that talking only added up to idle chatter, hurt feelings, confusion. So, it's your time... talk! Tell me why you left, why I found out through 4th person about the baby...why you wouldn't let me come for you...why you would marry a perfect stranger...why you are too selfish, too bull headed to let yourself and me, for that matter, be happy? Answer those things and maybe...maybe... I'll tell you what you want to know." That's me in David's shoes, I wanna know, lol! You are welcome on the questions! i was so happy to have Bees & Lin offer thier great questions to me for our list! Ands now ,SINCE i'm just in awe of what you wrote here! I feel like i read a small part of a fanfic! Great job here on what David so should have said! We sure know these characters inside and out! And i loved your story on FF.net too! I SQUEEEEE like a little girl LOL when i get to read new stuff! Keep it coming!
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Post by rose35 on Mar 10, 2009 22:42:05 GMT -5
Wow! Reading your earlier posts proves once again that I am a mere amateur in the company of professionals. Great thoughts folks. Gray we really do have such a great group of people here! I so look forward to reading all these posts every week. It sure does open your eyes to things you may not have seen, or understood before, etc,etc,etc. And i love your new AVATAR also! fantastic job!
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Post by manitobadesigner on Mar 10, 2009 22:42:27 GMT -5
Move in together? MOVE IN TOGETHER?!?! Um, okay, that kinda puts a different spin on things than "You still have your incisors, so I guess that means I still must care"! Can't wait to read the rest! **SQUEALS with laughter** Different spin indeed!
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